Talk:Wikimania 2013 Report/Han-Teng Liao

1. 'This is in stark contrast to the other two Chinese online Encyclopedias'. I'm not sure this makes sense in English.

In your Chinese article I imagine your readers will understand that you are comparing Wikimedia with the two min Chinese-language alternatives. An English reader won't have that frame of reference so I'd suggest you say something like

'This is in stark contrast to the two main Chinese online Encyclopedias' Mccapra (talk) 04:35, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

2. 'It involves not only technical development, but also a diverse set of measurements based on user experiment, feedback and actual data to ensure its success.' Not sure here whether you are saying that 'the process of developing VE' involved experiment, feedback etc. or whether you are saying that 'one of the benefits of VE is that it incorporates new metric tools which will provide WMF with feedback and data whenever editors use it.'Mccapra (talk) 04:44, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

3. 'To improve gender equality, the Foundation has now equal presentation in its Board of Trustees after an election in June 2013.' If you say this it means that the Foundation now has a policy of always maintaining gender parity on the Board. If this is the case the it would be helpful to say 'To improve gender equality, the Foundation has now a policy of equal presentation on its Board of Trustees'. The reference to the election in June suggests that in fact the current gender parity is an accident off the election outcome, and cold change in future. If this is the case, you can't say 'To improve....' Mccapra (talk) 05:40, 10 October 2013 (UTC)