2012 Annual Report/Design

This page is for comments, edits and feedback on the designed PDF of the 2012 Wikimedia UK Annual Report. The PDF is below. Please add in your views under the relevant sub heading for each printed page. Corrections and suggestions will be sent to the report's designer on Monday 16 April so we can get a second iteration of the designed report. Many thanks - and apologies if the formatting on wiki isn't perfect! Please do use the discussion page. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:10, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

Page one (front cover)

• Suggestion: Shaping, Sharing, Growing to be in our red, green and blue colours from WMUK logo --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: Change logo to include the WMUK word mark. Rock drum (talk • contribs) 11:48, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
  • Seconded. Logo needs to be WMUK's not the generic Wikimedia logo. Mike Peel (talk) 17:57, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
    • Thirded! the corret logo is used on page 2. The Land (talk) 09:25, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

• Suggestion: Should some lower-case text be used in either the title, or the text at the bottom? The Land (talk) 09:25, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Question: What's the image? It doesn't immediately say "Wikimedia" to me. The Land (talk) 09:25, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
  • Monnow Bridge, Monmouth. Connection with Monmouthpedia. Mike Peel (talk) 11:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
    • If I didn't see the connection with our work, is anyone else who picks up the Annual Report going to? The Land (talk) 15:59, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page two (inside front cover)

• Suggestion: Take all quotation marks our from the two messages. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: add 2011-12 before Chair in contents listing --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: Change blackout header to "When Wikipedia went dark: the blackout" --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Update: Each image should have its specific license noted (SB to source) --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Add staff names and roles below board details. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• The copyright of the document (CC-BY-SA) should be stated. Mike Peel (talk) 18:03, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
  • This also applies to the photo credits - we should state which Creative Commons licence for each photo. The Land (talk) 09:27, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• 'Chair' is part of 'Board of Trustees' - include the position amongst the other trustees rather than having it as a separate line. Mike Peel (talk)
• List all staff rather than just Jon. Mike Peel (talk) 18:03, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• WMUK logo should ideally be top-right to follow the wmf:Wikimedia visual identity guidelines. Mike Peel (talk) 18:03, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• State that the screenshots of webpages on page 7 are used under the Fair Dealing copyright exception. Also check copyright of Wikipedia blackoug page with WMF. Mike Peel (talk) 18:39, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

Page three

• Correction: add 2011-12 before the word Chair in initial heading --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Change Roger's opening sentence to "As Brandon says on one of our fundraising banners..."
• Suggestion: Vertically align Roger and Jon photos with the centre of their messages--Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
  • They look good at the bottom of the paragraph to me. Mike Peel (talk) 18:08, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Change sentence in final paragraph of |Roger's message to "I'm particularly pleased that Monmouthpedia shows..." --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Penultimate sentence of Jon's message - replace "much" with "most". Also change this in the pull quote. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Penultimate sentence of Jon's message - "volunteers" should not have initial cap --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: 'Wikipedian in Residence' (first paragraph of Roger's message) Mike Peel (talk) 18:08, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion/Correction: "that volunteers and employees who had battled" (second paragraph of Roger's message) Mike Peel (talk) 18:08, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: Double-spacing after full stops would be useful. Mike Peel (talk) 18:08, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

• Some comments on the prose:
  • Roger's section - the most important information about what Wikimedia UK has achieved as an organisation is the 2nd half of the first paragraph. We should probably open with more of this, and then talk about Roger's personal experiences later.

I think it works quite well in terms of setting the scene and telling a story. What do others think? --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:58, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

• • The "first line of the obituary" sentence won't make sense to anyone who wasn't following our fundraiser, which will be a good half of our audience. I'd prefer we avoided mentioning it.
  • Jon can't say he's played a "small" part. Some people will read that and think "If your chief executive is only playing a small part in your charity, you should sack him". Simply "playing a part" is humble enough. ;-)
  • There are inverted commas around parts of Jon's text, and not Roger's - should be consistently using them or not.
• I could probably have a closer look if that would be helpful. The Land (talk) 09:39, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page four

• Correction: 7 board members graphic shows eight people --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Sept 2011 box - remove comma --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Key moments from the year - Derby Museums section should from March 2011 be moved to April 2011. Rock drum (talk • contribs) 12:24, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: change number of new members to 330. --Stevie Benton (talk) 14:07, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: 'Double' or "x2" for membership increase Mike Peel (talk) 18:10, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: '25 community wikimeets' Mike Peel (talk) 18:10, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Style: Here and else where I'm not sure about the underlined, capital letters. I don't think the underlining is necessary, just caps is fine - but if we are underlining we should use a thicker line, the underline at the moment is very slim. The Land (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: The 7 board members graphic looks unfortunately like we are all giving a Nazi salute. Can we have a different posture, please? The Land (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: World website rankings & unique visitors - make it's clear it's Wikipedia? The Land (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: 25 Wikimeets - Wikimeet shouldn't be split over line, make it clear the Wikimeets in question are in the UK The Land (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: am not sure having staff recruitment as key moments in both Sept and Oct works - can we find something else for September? The Land (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

How about GLAM events held in Bristol, Coventry, Derby and London? --Stevie Benton (talk) 12:10, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

• Suggestion: Wikipedia goes dark - specify that it was for a short time (how many days) - otherwise people might think it was turned off permanently! The Land (talk) 09:50, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page five

• Correction: First para, second column: "but this year" currently reads "but his year" --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Same para, next sentence: change sentence to "they are writers and editors."--Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Same para, next sentence: remove first instance of the word "fact". --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Check 60% for gift aid - seems high. (I estimate 45% using 42k donors and 19k gift aid declarations in the database, perhaps excluding SmartDebit?) Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Can things be tweaked so there the second column starts with a new paragraph? Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: 'our founder; Jimmy Wales,' - he's not WMUK's founder, so state 'Wikipedia's founder, Jimmy Wales,' (also suggest using a comma rather than semi-colon). Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Membership: increased number disagrees with that on the previous page. I'd recommend just removing this sentence, since it's a bit confusing about WMUK members vs online volunteers (and in the latter case, an increase of 165 is small). Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• In general, the text on this page currently doesn't distinguish well between WMUK and WMF fundraising efforts. E.g. the leafy green backgrounds was a WMF discovery, which WMUK replicated. Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Pie chart: give %'s for the last 4 entries in the yellow boxes? Could do this with the other three for consistency. Mike Peel (talk) 18:23, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• We need to talk somewhere about what the money is spent on. In particular we need to be clear that just over half of the money we raise is passed on to the Wikimedia Foundation and ensures Wikipedia keeps running, while the other half is spent supporting our programme work in the UK. I don't know whether we're including any summary accounts in this document? The Land (talk) 10:11, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• I haven't checked the figures, but I should do when I get a moment. The Land (talk) 10:11, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page six

• Suggestion: Change blackout header to "When Wikipedia went dark: the blackout" --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: remove stray quotation marks on right hand of the page --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Say 'well described' not 'best described'. Mike Peel (talk) 18:36, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• The white text on a black background is rather difficult to read with this font (or perhaps I've been staring at this computer screen too much today...) Mike Peel (talk) 18:36, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
  • In general, white body text on a black background is very poor for readability. Maybe there is a way to get round this by putting the background on a gradient...? Stevie, I think this needs some thought. The Land (talk) 10:17, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
  • I found it very readable, actually, and if anything it will look better on paper than on screen. I wouldn't want the whole report to be white-on-black, but having this page in separate colours marks it out in a striking way, which I like. MartinPoulter (talk) 14:45, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Needs to talk about WMUK's role here as distinct from Wikipedia - i.e. that the blackout was the Wikipedia community's decision, and that WMUK was just involved in communicating what was going on, and why, with the world rather than doing lobbying. Mike Peel (talk) 18:36, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
  • I agree. The Land (talk) 10:17, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Can I suggest reducing the amount of the New Statesman article quoted, and try to find some more statistics on the scale and impact of the blackout? At the moment it's 3/4 of a page of text on the same subject, which is a lot. Could do with breaking up a bit more. 10:17, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion (here and elsewhere) - attribute quotes in the pull-out boxes to individuals. The Land (talk) 10:17, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
  • I disagree with this, actually: readability and lack of clutter is essential, and pull-quote boxes, and the presence of quotation marks identifies it as a quote from a person. Who it is becomes clear when they reader looks at the article text. MartinPoulter (talk) 14:31, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: "every news media" (first para) is ungrammatical. How about "every news outlet"? MartinPoulter (talk) 14:28, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page seven

• Correction: First column, second para. End of para to read "privacy and libel laws in outlets such as" instead of ending sentence. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Second column, top para - Change "lead" to "led" and capitalise The Independent. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• End of second paragraph, 'Outlets such as ...' is a sentence fragment, end with something like 'covered this subject.' Mike Peel (talk) 18:46, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Second column, 7th line, missing space in 'Financial Times,The independent'. Mike Peel (talk) 18:46, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• 6th paragraph - the third sentence doesn't clearly link to the second. (what connects Wikipedia vandalism with what to do without Wikipedia?) Mike Peel (talk) 18:46, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: 'GLAM:WIKI' to 'GLAM-WIKI' for consistency with usage elsewhere. Mike Peel (talk) 18:46, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• The CRUK workshop is over a year ago now. Can we find something more recent to lead this? The Land (talk) 10:18, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
  • Agree, this Cancer Research coverage is outside the period this report should be covering. This means we should also remove that screenshot of the BBC coverage. MartinPoulter (talk) 14:39, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
    • Erm, the (second/biggest) part of the workshop was on 28 March 2011, so within the Feb 2011-Feb 2012 period that this report covers. The BBC article was 4 April. Mike Peel (talk) 15:06, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Final paragraph: instead of "GLAM:Wiki 2012" can we say "our GLAM and Education conferences"? MartinPoulter (talk) 14:39, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Can we include a screenshot from the Physics World feature article? (free registration required) MartinPoulter (talk) 14:39, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• It's local media, but maybe worth a screenshot: [1] MartinPoulter (talk) 14:39, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page eight

• Suggestion: Page needs an image. Perhaps Herbert Art Gallery and Museum? --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: First column, top half - add [User:HJ Mitchell] to list of contributors. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: First column, second half - italicise Liam's intro. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: First column, third para - remove duplication of the word "is" --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: Liam's section - first para: change since to during. Rock drum (talk • contribs) 11:48, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: I'm a bit tired of seeing Liam's photo when we mention UK GLAM (it's so 2010). Can we replace with something like the group photo:--Fæ (talk) 11:01, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

There's lots of pictures from GLAM-WIKI 2010 that could be used. Or look through the subcategories of Commons:Category:GLAM in the UK. Or use a wider angle picture of Liam, e.g. File:Backstage Pass at the British Museum 18.jpg. Or something like File:Backstage Pass at the British Museum 36.jpg (yes, I know where all of WMUK's skeletons lie. ;-) ) Mike Peel (talk) 18:58, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

• Suggestion: play up the fact that the very first 'editathon' ever was at the British Library in January 2011. We (<ego>me and Tango</ego>) came up with the concept, and it's now been replicated world-wide to great success. Mike Peel (talk) 18:58, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
  • I second this. :-) The Land (talk) 10:29, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• 'User:Name' is the usual format, rather than 'user:Name'. (bottom of the top left-hand column) Mike Peel (talk) 18:58, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

• It would be good if we could include some figures about the number of museums, galleries, archives etc we are working with, and the total attendance at GLAM events over the last year. The number would be quite impressive. Also, this will be read by various GLAM institutions, might be a good idea to mention contact details to use if someone wants to get in touch regarding outreach opportunities! The Land (talk) 10:29, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• I think we should reduce the amount of space we give Liam on this page. It's all good stuff, but Liam isn't familiar to most of our audience. The Land (talk) 10:29, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Pictures - I took some decent shots of "editing in the wild" at Editathon,_British_Library. The Land (talk) 10:29, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• This is the only point in the Annual Report where individual volunteers are recognised. Lots of people have made important contributions one way or another, and I'm not sure we should name 3 individuals here when we're not naming anyone in other areas of our work. But open to discussion. The Land (talk) 10:29, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
  • I think it's good to name people - it helps make it clear that there are many volunteers involved, rather than masking that behind 'we'. The worry is that we end up missing people out who should be mentioned, though... Mike Peel (talk) 11:57, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Correction: 3rd column, 2nd para - meets > meetups. Rock drum (talk • contribs) 17:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page nine

• Suggestion: Needs images! --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
  • Definitely! We don't have many, but take a look through commons:Category:Wikimedia UK University Outreach. Perhaps a cleaned-up version of File:ImperialWikiSoc5.JPG? Or File:Cancer Research UK Workshop.jpg for expert engagement? Mike Peel (talk) 19:17, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
    • Since we're mentioning the Girl Geeks Dinners, it's a good place in which to shoehorn the Wikipedia Cake photo (look back through the blog archives to the Girl Geek dinner post). The Land (talk) 10:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
      • Perhaps, although there's not as clear link between 'cake' and 'education' as there is 'people' and 'education'. Pictures of the cakes are at commons:Category:Wikimedia UK cakes (perhaps File:Wikimedia Manchester Girl Geeks September 2011 6.jpg is the best of them, if only for the contrast with the fruit behind. ;-) ). Mike Peel (talk) 12:00, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Second column, first line - insert word "College" after Imperial. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Right at the end, "Open Educational Resources" is in a different font weight. Mike Peel (talk) 19:17, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Speaking of JISC, can we mention that we're also working with them on Wikipedia's role as an Open Educational Resource for the centenary of World War I? The Land (talk) 10:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• Grey text on that shade of yellow (not a subtle hue of yellow at all) is very hard to read! MartinPoulter (talk) 14:47, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Page ten

• To feature infographic currently being designed.
• Given that Monmouth is more of a 2012-13 story (most of it is/has been taking place after February 2012), I would suggest taking content from the 2012 Activity Plan and putting that in here instead, giving an overview of the projects that are taking place over the year (where they haven't already been covered elsewhere). Mike Peel (talk) 09:54, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

Page eleven (inside back cover)

• Correction: First column, second para - professionally organised > professionally-organised. Rock drum (talk • contribs) 12:51, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

Page twelve (Outside back cover)

• Replace Nottingham address with Development House address as our registered address. --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
  • No point having the address in two places, so remove first mention of address. MartinPoulter (talk) 15:10, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• This page should really use the Wikimedia logo without localisation if it's being used to link all of the Wikimedia sister projects together... Mike Peel (talk) 18:29, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• Add @wikimediauk (twitter/identi.ca)? Mike Peel (talk) 19:22, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
• I found this page a bit uninspiring. I suggest shrinking the text and the graphic, and making room for a couple of sentences that persuade someone who picks up the document that they should open it and read the whole thing. How about "Over the past year, Wikimedia UK has been officially recognised as a charity, set up an office with four full-time staff, and a raised a million pounds in its record-breaking fundraiser. This report shows the variety of ways we are working towards the Wikimedia goal of free knowledge for everyone." Shrinking the text at the top would make for more whitespace around it, which would look more professional. MartinPoulter (talk) 14:59, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
• The logos are only really identifiable to insiders and may be off-putting to a general audience. We really need text labels to explain what all these projects are. Clockwise from the top: Wikimania, Wikibooks, Meta-Wiki, Wikiquote, Wikispecies, MediaWiki, Wikiversity, Wiktionary, Wikinews, Wikisource, Wikimedia Commons, Wikipedia. In my experience, people who are fans of Wikipedia but don't know much more about us have their imagination fired up when they hear that there are projects called Wikiversity and Wikispecies. MartinPoulter (talk) 15:10, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

General notes

• Correction: remove all full stops from pull quotes --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Suggestion: Can we replace some of the yellow with out brand colours? --Stevie Benton (talk) 11:40, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
• Looks really, really good - great work! Mike Peel (talk) 19:22, 13 April 2012 (UTC)